The children have been given Maths homework to complete on a worksheet about division or fractions. This work has been set based on our recent end of Spring Term assessments, which the class have been asked to share with you.

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As part of their Literacy homework I have asked them to use their reading and research skills to find information about one of the Gods from Ancient Egypt and to write at least one paragraph on this blog about them.

I am not restricting anyone on the maximum that they want to write, but I am requesting the following as a minimum...

Blue: Write one paragraph that is punctuated perfectly.

Green: Write one paragraph that shows you know a proper noun needs capital letters.

Red: Write one paragraph that includes uses of commas...either in a list or to add a clause.

Yellow: Write one paragraph that uses varied vocabulary (especially with the sentence openers).
 


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Alistair
04/09/2013 8:30am

I am doing the God Anubin.
Anubis was associated with the mummification and protection of the dead for their journey into the afterlife.He was usually portrayed as a half human, half jackal, or in full jackal form wearing a ribbon and holding a flail in the crook of its arm.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:06pm

Well done Alistair. Some great information and you have punctuated it well and used commas too!

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Nieve
04/09/2013 11:29am

Thoth was depicted as an Ibis.Thoth was the Egyptian god of writing,wisdom,numbers,the arts,astronomy and magic.He was also a god of the Underworld ,in charge of the scales in the Hall of Judgement.Thoth used the scales to weigh the heart of the deceased against the feather of truth to determine if they were worthy to enter the afterlife.As the scribe of the gods, Thoth recorded the result of each judgement.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:07pm

Good vocabulary used Nieve. Remember to use your own words and not to copy text directly from other books or websites.

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leah
04/09/2013 12:03pm

Ma'at, Symbol of Order Ma'at, Goddess of Truth, Balance, Order...
Ma'at, unlike Hathor and Nephthys, seemed to be more of a concept than an actual goddess. Her name, literally, meant 'truth' in Egyptian. She was truth, order, balance and justice personified. She was harmony, she was what was right, she was what things should be. It was thought that if Ma'at didn't exist, the universe would become chaos, once again!

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:08pm

This is punctuated well Leah. Remember not to copy words directly from other books or websites and to use your own words instead.

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William
04/11/2013 7:58am

Bastet

Bastet was the daughter of the sun god Ra. People started to worship her in 3200BC and she was a protective goddess. She was considered to be gentle and in paintings she always had the head of a cat. The cat was a symbol of Bastet and cats were considered to be sacred by the ancient Egyptians, some thought they were more important than humans.

The ancient Egyptians turned to Bastet for protection and blessing ; she was also the goddess of pleasure and family. The ancient Egyptians celebrated her feast day on October the 31st and she had a temple built to worship her in Bubastis which is in south east Egypt. The temple was always full of cats who were carried around in baskets. The ruins of the temple remain today and many tourists visit them.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:10pm

Great piece of writing William. It's very informative.

You have used commas perfectly as well as using various sentence lengths to make your writing more interesting.

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Philip
04/11/2013 8:36am

Ra

Ra was the god of the sun and of creation. He was pictured as a hawk-headed man who had a sun disc above him. Ra was the greatest god when it came to powers. His powers lived in his hidden name, but only he knew his hidden name so only he could use his powers. The ancient Egyptians believed that he made the world and the heavens and all the gods wanted to be his friends as they hoped that he would tell them his name and get to share his powers. Isis wanted his powers so she sent a snake to poison him and when the pain was so bad he gave in and told her his hidden name. Therefore, she got to share his powers.

Ra was a popular god and pharaohs built pyramids and temples in his honour.



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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:12pm

A very good piece of writing Philip... I found out something new here too about Isis!

You have recognised the proper nouns and put the capital letters in the right place. Well done.

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Jack
04/12/2013 11:57am


Anubis

Anubis was the Egyptian god of the dead, tombs and embalming .He had the head of a jackal and was very unique at what he did.He was thought to help prepare mummies.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:13pm

Well done Jack. You have identified the proper nouns and given them capital letters. Well done.

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Rosie
04/14/2013 8:32am

Isis was one of the oldest Goddesses from Ancient Egypt, but where she came from is unclear.Isis was her greek name, but the Ancient Egyptians called her Ast,Iset or Uset which also means female of the throne.She worshiped every temple in the land.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:17pm

A good piece of information writing Rosie: well done.

I'm being really picky here...although it's difficult with non-fiction writing, try to vary your sentence openers so they aren't all proper nouns or pronouns.

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Theo
04/14/2013 8:40am

Thoth was the god of writing and knowledge.He had the body of a man, a head of an ibis and he held a wrtting palette. Thoth was connected to the moon.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:19pm

Perfect use of full stops and commas Theo. Well done!

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Isaac
04/14/2013 11:00am

horusis halmet is made of two parts upper egypy is the white part.The red part is lower egypt.Horus has an egale head mask. And has a wepon.And the battle aganist seth toke 80 years.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:21pm

Good effort Isaac.

Try to make sure your first sentence starts with a capital letter and try to avoid starting sentences with the word 'and'.

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Ben
04/15/2013 8:24am

Horus is one of the oldest and most significant Gods in ancient Egyptian religion, who was worshipped from at least the late Predynastic period through to Greco-Roman times.He is the king of the Earth.He was most often shown as a falcon, most likely a lanner or peregrine, or as a man with a falcon head..In early Egypt, Horus was the brother of Isis, Osiris, Set and Nephthys. As different cults formed, he became the son of Isis. Isis remained the sister of Osiris, Seth, and Nephthys.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:23pm

You have taught me something new here Ben!

You have used commas well and recognised that proper nouns need capital letters: well done!

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Hollie
04/15/2013 8:40am

Horus ,the falcon head god, battled Seth and regained the thrown.He was the new king of the earth and his dad ,Osiris was the new king of our under world yey.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:24pm

Great use of commas to add a clause! Well done.

Try not to sound too chatty Hollie: I would avoid putting "yey" at the end of sentences in your work.

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Hollie
04/18/2013 11:17am

Ok just making it more exiting but will avoid it

Ari
04/15/2013 9:20am

Hathor, wife of Horus, is a goddess with cow ears, dark hair and appears to be wearing different colour dresses. The ancient Egyptian goddess Hathor was linked to music, love, fertility, joy and birth. The goddess was believed to be the mother of a pharaoh. She was the patron of all women.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:28pm

Perfect use of commas Ari...both in lists and as a clause.

Make sure you keep using these skills in all your writing.

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Bethany
04/15/2013 10:35am

The Ancient Egyptians worsheped their gods for everything. They also beleved that when the sun set, the gods moved it across the sky.

Anibis is the god of the dead and Osiris is the god of the underworld. there are over 2000 gods.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:29pm

Well done Bethany.

Don't forget to check for capital letters before you finish your work (last sentence).

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Sophie
04/15/2013 11:07am

Seth.
Seth has a head like a greyhound. He has a curved muzzle, almond shaped eyes and long straight pointy ears. He is the God of chaos. He murdered his brother Osiris because he was jealous of him as he wanted to rule the earth and be King!
Seth tricked Osiris into climbimg into an expensive chest - promising him that it would be his if he could fit into it. After Osiris climbed in, Seth and some other Gods nailed the chest shut and threw it into the river Nile, so that he would drown. Later, Isis (Osiris's caring wife) found the chest, however Seth was so angry that he cut Osiris into fourteen peices! He scattered the peices across Egypt. Isis found all the peices and put them back together and brought him back to life. After doing that, Osiris and Isis had just one son, who was called Horus. Horus battled against Seth because he had killed his father. While they were fighting, Seth plucked out Horus's eye, but Horus won the battle and killed Seth, so Horus remained on the Throne.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:32pm

Super piece of writing Sophie.

You have used a huge amount of punctuation correctly and I hope you can use some of it in your next piece of independent story writing. Keep it up!

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George
04/15/2013 11:24am

Seth was believed to be the God of Chaos, he murdered his brother so he could be king he also took Horus's eye out in another battle, he had the head of a Greyhound.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:35pm

Good effort George.

You have tried to use commas to add a clause but I feel you need a full stop somewhere in here. Can you reread it out loud and work out what needs changing?

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Holly
04/15/2013 11:31am

Bes was an ugly god like human. He always wore lion skin and headdresses with feathers on. He protected people from evil.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:37pm

Well done Holly: your proper noun has a capital letter.

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Ella
04/15/2013 11:34am

Osiris.
Osiris is one of the most famous Egyptian Gods. He is shown as a human and a King with a crown of Ostrich feathers and reeds and holding a crook and flail but with greeny/blue skin. He was King of Egypt, but his brother Seth was jealous of him and wanted to take his place as king. Seth got angrier and angrier until he decided to kill his brother. Seth told Osiris to try and fit in an expensive gold, shiny coffer saying that it would be his if he could fit inside it. When Osiris did fit inside - Seth slammed the lid shut and nailed him in. Seth threw him in the river Nile to drown. Isis (Osiris's wife) searched for him and found him, but couldn't open the coffer. When Seth realised what she had done, he got so cross that he cut Osiris into fourteen peices and hid them all around Egypt. With help - Isis found all the peices and put them back together. Osiris was nearly completely dead, but he was able to have a son, Horus, with his wife. Osiris became God of the underworld as he was dead. The Kings of Egypt, called Pharaohs, were considered to be the incarnation of the God Horus when they were alive and then Osiris when they died.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:40pm

I'm very impressed Ella!

A little tip: try not to use the word 'and' too many times in one sentence...replace the second one with a full stop instead? - I find when I read it out loud I notice what I need to change.

Keep up this brilliant writing!

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Harvey
04/15/2013 11:46am

Ra, the god of creation, was believed by they ancient egyptians to have created the world.

His body is a falcon with a sun on his head,which was symbol of creation.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:41pm

Very informative and a great use of commas.

Well done Harvey...try and use these skills in your story writing next week too.

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Amy
04/15/2013 12:14pm

Ancient Egyptian gods - Ma'at god of truth, some Ancient Egyptians
believe that if Ma'at didn't exist there would be more chaos (again).

Horus god of sky, son of Osirs and Isiis. when his father went down to the underworld, Horus fought Seth, Seth pocked out one of Horus eyes .
Bes looked after children and families incase they where injured but his face was usally shown and he was very ugly.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:43pm

You have shown me you can recognise and use proper nouns correctly Amy!

Well done! Keep up these writing skills in all areas of your writing.

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Poppy
04/15/2013 1:11pm

The Ancient egyptians believed that Bes was the god of protecting family's and pregnant women at childbirth as well as snake and scorpion bites.They say that he wears a beatiful coloured feathered headdress and ragged lion skin. And he is known to be very ugly to scare away evil spirits from children. Most familys had a small shrine in there home, where they worshipped statues of Bes, and other gods. I had chosen this god because the name reminded me of my little sisters name.

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C Tomkins
04/16/2013 12:52pm

Good vocabulary used here Poppy, which makes it interesting to read. Well done.

Can you remember the conversation we had about apostrophes earlier? This should be 'families' because Bes is protecting lots of families.

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bethan
04/17/2013 12:19am

THE MYSTERY OF OSIRIS
Osiris plays a key role and is a central figure in the ancient Egyptian mysteries and in the Order Of The Morning Star. He is god of the earth but one day Seth his brother... killed him! From that moment on Osiris was god of the under world and Seth was god of the Earth. It was Osiris who was the beloved pharaoh of Egypt. Osiris is the husband of Isis thay had 1 son.

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C Tomkins
04/17/2013 12:55am

Well done Bethan.

You have really thought about your punctuation and proper nouns. Keep it up!

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